Animation Workshop Feedback - Anonymous #3 (2023)

all righty new version here let's go it is a different setup o I like it it's nice and clear nice and the end nice it's a lot of changes I love it so let's go one by one here you can probably this is up to you not not that it's wrong or anything but you know you can always push the the silhouette when it goes ah this is more like it's not I won't say hesitant but it's kind of like a I might eat it versus you might bring the arm up a bit higher hand here Pizza is you know dangling and he has his head up here mouth is open type of thing bigger if you want you might argue that he would not see it but I think we can just assume that it's going to make noise it will be fine but careful it's not that it's overlapping but it's like it's pretty fast make that was a very professional sound going from this to this I don't think it's too bad again there's nothing wrong with this whole setup this is a suggestion you could potentially make the silhouette cleaner um you know maybe he really really wants to eat it that's why he really really fights for it this seems more like I guess I got to eat it versus especially with the hand out like this like ah do I have to eat eat it versus oh this is I love pizza I'm going to eat this you know so maybe that could be a pose where you can you can push that idea he might lean further back with the shell the head might be out here like really I'm going to eat this and then you can just always make that wobble big or whatever to draw attention to itself that's you know just totally up to you then we have that's cool I think a bit fast I wonder once you spline this if you're going to hold this a bit longer meaning that you're going to keep going up with the camera because you're tilting a bit too soon I know this is in steep so might not be a problem once you splain it but I'm wonderings just timing wise it might go and maybe I wonder if you're going to add five frames six frames to this hang time and then drop that's all very clear and clean let's see cuz he goes there now it should be okay this running should be should the camera be further out that we'll understand more what this guy is but I don't think so because you see him here I think it's you're fine but this is nice and clean you can always bring that maybe up a bit higher and over and then have like some pepperoni sticking out and then for this he just seems B you know just like with here with this pose kind of like when he gets through this it's a bit even there's an offset there it's slightly mirrored I'm just wondering he seems not that he seems bored but it's more like hey hey like you know like what is his character is he just kind of like hey you took my pizza I'm not the smartest guy type of thing and is is that something you can do like in like once he's SP it's going to have a waddle over there or is he is kind of like hey I don't like this and he has his you know fists down here like I don't like this blah blah blah like how far could you put this or push this so it's not just movement but a bit more personality driven potentially just the thought I will probably take that shoe out a bit this way so going clean your Sil wet so it's not straight at us then he gets ready I do like this a lot though because we're getting into that's very cool I like this we get to see the face it's a good fake out I like that look there too and he gets ready you might argue maybe at that point the arm could be lower this could be higher I don't you want to obstruct this for this long again not that it's too bad because we get to see it here but just worth a thought you want to maybe clean that up a bit and then this once you spline this this might just be a bit simple in terms of going up you know it it feels like it very much I got the pizza and then slurp could this be like he enjoys it a lot like I stole this from you and it's awesome this is just a thought you know where he you know when you have a basketball you twist it and then the ball go so what if he throws this up like that it does a bit of a twist into his mouth or you know like a throw up or something now there's that much room so that's why I'm thinking kind of it's kind of rotating in his hand and goes down little extra flourish and then probably let me see he goes into this ha again as a victory pose it's a bit mirrored so you can think in terms of H you can go like this and at least maybe take another step into like a different kind of pose where it's maybe just kind of pushed more into 3/4 what is he doing next hold on he gets punched I mean that could work he goes like this and then either I wonder Thinking Out Loud here i't thought that through if he takes a step back with this leg or this leg just something where it's like huh maybe a little taunt you know it could be like take a little step back or maybe a slight one forward where he shifts his head left and right Wiggles his shoulders kind of like eh eh what are you going to do now what are you going to do now like a little bit of attitude and spunk and then the guy does and I think instead of just rotating this up I will and then rotate the fist over so that we have the fingers more into into a profile view fist so it's less finger rotate but also restro it into like a a bent you know bent Fist and he realizes uhoh this gets a bit wonky what am I looking at he brings this up into what not sure what this is is this the side I know that could be a bit cleaner where you can maybe cheat this into like a fullon fist here nice clean green silhouette color silhouette but I love this idea here that it punches that thing out and the same thing for clarity here you might as well bring that pizza all the way over here hand this clean little bit of arm and then the shell just kind of really nice clean silhouett it doesn't have bit of a tangent there then it's that's cute I like this again it could be something where he takes a step and it's maybe slight turn so you can see that mouth a bit more open not that it's un clear I think it's okay just wondering if you have room there and then that's fun you might need one more frame into this but once we sply in this should be okay huh what's the camera doing let me just check does this and the camera goes yeah that's mainly that little things here and there but I think it's it's a lot more entertaining subjectively of course it's a lot cleaner than before I think that works pretty well yeah thank you all right there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whenever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like And subscribe would be awesome all right thank you